Thursday, July 4, 2019

How to improve writing (no. 83)

In The New York Times tonight:

Speaking to a rain-soaked audience behind bulletproof glass, Mr. Trump spent most of his time recounting the history of the armed forces.
An added preposition makes things right:
Speaking to a rain-soaked audience from behind bulletproof glass, Mr. Trump spent most of his time recounting the history of the armed forces.
See the difference?

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[This post is no. 83 in a series, dedicated to improving stray bits of public prose.]

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