The words that began episodes of The Paper Chase, as spoken by Professor Charles W. Kingsfield Jr. (John Houseman):
“The study of law is something new and unfamiliar to most of you — unlike any other schooling that you have ever known before.”Something new = new. New = unfamiliar. Any other schooling = any schooling. Ever known before = known. Like they say, omit needless words. Thus:
“The study of law is new to most of you — unlike any schooling you have known.”I’m not sure whether removing the curlicues makes the statement more Kingsfieldian, or less so. What do you think? Yes, Mr. Hart?
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[Why “most of you“? Perhaps some of the students have previously tried law school, left, and returned. This post is no. 42 in a series, “How to improve writing,” dedicated to improving stray bits of public prose.]
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Oh, the short form offers a definite improvement in clarity and directness.
"Words dilute meaning."
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