tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8343608.post994960040191348032..comments2024-03-28T15:17:18.477-05:00Comments on Orange Crate Art: How to improve writing (no. 106)Michael Leddyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05547732736861224886noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8343608.post-60704580956979484462023-01-07T09:49:19.504-06:002023-01-07T09:49:19.504-06:00I like that too. Immediately graspable.I like that too. Immediately graspable.Michael Leddyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05547732736861224886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8343608.post-29604349007733321382023-01-07T08:31:47.524-06:002023-01-07T08:31:47.524-06:00I just saw a reference to a book Sustainable Energ...I just saw a reference to a book <i>Sustainable Energy – Without the Hot Air</i> by David MacKay that says, 'MacKay’s mantra is “numbers not adjectives”'.<br />Numbers not adjectives!<br />I like that.Frescahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15323129046492056942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8343608.post-21395880758777599882023-01-05T09:41:44.192-06:002023-01-05T09:41:44.192-06:00I agree. I think the series of short sentences is ...I agree. I think the series of short sentences is more effective too. The numbers are in the article, with pictures, group by group — I think that’s why I didn’t think of a more drastic revision.Michael Leddyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05547732736861224886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8343608.post-86789281085597919652023-01-05T08:24:47.877-06:002023-01-05T08:24:47.877-06:00I especially like Elaine's solution. "Mos...I especially like Elaine's solution. "Most" is vague--numbers are information.Frescahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15323129046492056942noreply@blogger.com